Sunday, January 23, 2011

Sin


Failed attempts of fidelity...
Redemption was all he asked.
For he was a sinner!
Ananya

6 Your takes:

Rumya said...

Wonderful take on the prompt, Ananya. All a sinner can ask for is redemption, I suppose.
BTW, love the template header, ruby red!! :)

spiritsoflena said...

Great job! I like the alliteration in the first line.

Nanka said...

Loyalty is what everyone seeks, an error of infidelity lets loose all hell, besides a plea for pardon I suppose much more needs to be done.

Great thought for the prompt.

Leo said...

very poignant first line, Ananya :) beautiful tercet.

edenhills said...

Very nice haiku for the prompt.

Teresa

Leo said...

Ananya, there is much more to a haiku than just three lines. Haiku is syllable based, and has certain rules to it. 3 lines together can have 17 syllables or less.. (syllable is pronunciation sound.. e.g.: Ananya, has 3 coz u say it as An-an-ya :) ), its usually associated with nature and has a seasonal word. Though Haiku Heights approve non nature ones that are called senryu, as host, I just thought I’d let you know. Haiku is a very nice form to try.. and I think you can do a nice one as well.

As I commented before, I liked your attempt a lot, and I hope to see you try and become better at writing Haikus too :) thanks for suggesting Mirage as a topic. I've kept that as the topic at HH for 27th Feb.

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